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问好作者,作品脉络清晰,有画面感,欣赏学习。白鹭寄书处可再斟酌。
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格律正确,春意阑珊之情,淡饭哀怨的伤春悲秋之情!
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您的【谢池春】句序不对,上片应该46,34,46,34.下片:46,34,45,34.您 自已对一下。
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